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Chess board by ~jonofox:iconjonofox:

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Chess is the game of life,
Theres black and theres white,
Good and evil

One can make a good move,
The other a bad
Determination is the key

People may call it a thinking game
People may be happy because there going so well
But that can change if they loose their queen

The pieces if they were alive
Would think they had free will
We can move where we like, they would say

But to us we know
That free will is not the case
There is a winner and a loser
Its already been decided

So would the chess pieces still play
If they knew all it was, was a game
That determination played no part
Thinking was not the key
No matter what happens the end has been decided

So the question is
Yes there is always a question at the end of every poem
Are we those chess pieces?
Do we really have free will?
Or has the end already been decided and we are just another chess game?
©2004-2009 ~jonofox
:iconjonofox:

Author's Comments

Im not sure how good it is, not sure if it works but bassically im exploring thoe whole if God knows everything so what we are going to do 2morrow etc then do we really have free will? And if not then aren't we just another board game that we think we have control over but really we dont'? hope that made sense i would like to know what u think of this.

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:iconthe-artful-dodger:
~The-Artful-Dodger May 5, 2004, 6:01:31 AM
great philosophy! Great poem....I love poems that ask questions. Marvelous job.

--
"I saw an insect learn to fly... now show me, now show me, now show me how to shine."
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~Lizabell May 5, 2004, 3:05:41 PM
Yeah, great imagery Jono, i really like the idea of us as chess pieces...its a really full on concept to grasp and you show the struggle really well.
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~bradk May 5, 2004, 9:55:23 PM
great work fox! its a really good poem. its a hard thing to understand and youve done an awesome job to write about it so well
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~jakenauta May 5, 2004, 11:01:08 PM
i think your awesome at this type of thing
:icondangerousdave:
~dangerousdave May 6, 2004, 2:03:03 AM
This is a really good poem! This is a really wierd concept and youve expressed it well.
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~bigred2 May 6, 2004, 2:06:14 AM
Yeah mate, i concur with everyone else. This is really good and brings up some excellent ideas and stuff. It is one of thoise things that when you think about it, it makes your head hurt. I already have a headache so i am not going to think about it for too long. Good work!

--
Smurfs are asexual
:iconjonofox:
~jonofox May 6, 2004, 5:59:47 AM
Thanks heaps for your rad feedback! :)
:iconrupu:
~rupu Jun 3, 2004, 5:42:20 PM
hey jono i like this poem. Id like to comment on technical aspects first, well i expected rhyme at first because of the structure of stanza one, though i think it worked quite well structurally despite that. I like the idea, I think you should keep working on it. -Ru
:icondangerousdave:
~dangerousdave Jul 21, 2004, 8:01:30 PM
Hey Jono,
I was reading this poem again, and i was thinking, you said:

"So would the chess pieces still play
If they knew all it was, was a game"

Did they have a choice?
Do they have a choice to play?
Do they have a right to judge the players?

If the piece decided to attack another piece, it would think that attacking was it's own choice, but really the player is in control and the player moved him...
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